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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Today , in various developed countries,
food
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 from all over the world is available on the market. Frequently, shoppers buy the
food
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 and eat it. I think
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 we can consider it as a positive
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. Despite the fact, it will reduce the value of local products,
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, we can give facilities to tourists, international students and
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 foreign workers.
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 communicating through social media, fast travelling,
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 accomplishment in minutes and buying every
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 from the nearby bazaar. In
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 year's survey, the UK
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 department claimed that most shoppers bought foreign
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 from the market and gave good compliments about
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 facility. Recently, famous world's best soccer player, Ronaldo , in one interview stated that near my residency there is a market where I buy every
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 like SM yoghurt, fresh meat, snacks, packaged chicken,various kinds of eggs and other significant daily life products. Most of them are foreign products.
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, he said, I am thankful to our government who do
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 kind of arrangement for locals.
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, we know that nowadays, people visit foreign countries to study,
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 and
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spend holidays with family. It is a fact that most of them like to eat their traditional
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. In America,
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 organisations claimed that foreign people like to eat their traditional
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. So, to make our economy strong, we just need to provide every
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 category in our supermarkets. To pen down all the points mentioned above, I would like to state that providing every country with
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 in shops helps countries to grow. Our nation will be able to
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 a well-managed country where every facility for
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 is available. It can have a positive impact on foreign people who want to visit, study or
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.

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content
Make your view clear at the start and keep it there to the end.
structure
Link ideas to the main point and cut extra facts that do not fit.
structure
Use one or two strong examples that clearly back your idea.
language
Check language: change 'positive work' to 'positive development' and fix clear grammar mistakes.
content
You show you want to talk about foods from many places.
support
Some real life examples are used to back ideas.
tone
You write with effort to explain your view.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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