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Band 4

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

​ ​In the modern era, in many
countries
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,
food
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 products are used for import and export trading. In my opinion,
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 type of trading has more negative aspects. Likely, it can cause harmful environmental impacts, may worsen
food
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 safety issues, and can damage
to
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local economies. ​
Environment
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Environmental
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 impact is a big issue for the transportation of foodstuffs.
Globally
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Global
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 exportation of
foods
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food
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require
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requires
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 more usage of fuel for trucks, ships, and other vehicles. When fuel burns, it produces greenhouse gases, especially Carbon dioxide, which causes disasters like acid rain, smog and
decrease
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a decrease
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 in
quality
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the quality
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 of
air
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the air
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.To illustrate,
In
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in
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India
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India,
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 approximately every year
forty
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, forty
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percent
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per cent
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 of
food
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 materials are
exports
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exported
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 from different
countries
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, namely
avacado
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avocado
 fruit,flavour
yougrts
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yoghurts
,
korean
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Korean
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 noodles,vegetables and some Chinese foods. ​
Food
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 safety concerns
is
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are
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 one of the drawbacks of
food
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 exportation. Generally, exports of
food
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 from other
countries
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 take about 1-2 weeks. In
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 time period,
food
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stuff
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apply
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quality can change, and it might not remain fresh. If a customer
take
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takes
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this
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 package of
food
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 and
eat
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eats
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in
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it in
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 future, he may face stomach issues. The second negative is that it could damage the local economy. Farmers can face hustle for selling
of
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their
food
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 products, which can
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 to loss of jobs in agriculture
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source
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a source
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 of income for farmers. To exemplify, in 1980 in Japan, a citizen died after using an exported dairy product. Now, in
Japan
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Japan,
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 every dairy product package
change
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changes
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 its colour
,
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 when the expiration date is near. In conclusion,
in
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from
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 my perspective,
negative
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the negative
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 aspects outweigh the positive factors of
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 new development.
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 advancement could diminish the
jobs
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job
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 opportunities in farmlands,
can
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cause
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 do emission of toxic pollutants in the atmosphere, and may be able to change the quality of other
countries
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'
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food stuffs
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foodstuffs
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task response
Keep a clear view in every paragraph. Start with your view in the intro and rest it at the end in a short conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Make the ideas in order. Use one idea per paragraph and use simple links like and, also, but, first, then.
task response
Use small, real examples from life or simple facts. Avoid too many facts that are not true or made up.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Fix mistakes like capital letters and wrong words.
overall
Be careful with time and word choice. Use precise words and be clear.
strength
The writer has a clear stance against the idea.
strength
There is a good attempt to use examples.
strength
The essay uses a simple and direct style, easy to read.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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