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The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.
The line chart illustrates the comparison of new international
students
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 from three different countries, which are Iran, Greece, and Turkey
at
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 Sheffield University from 2005 to 2009.
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, it is evident that the number of enrolled
students
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 from Iran and Greece climbed steadily over five years, whilst Turkish
freshmans
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freshmen
 reached
its
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their
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 peak in 2005 and experienced a significant decline throughout the period.
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 with, the figure for Turkish
students
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 started as the lowest at 20 in 2005 before
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 a significant
increased
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 to 120 by 2009.
This
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 was followed by Iranian, which started at 40
students
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 in 2005 and rose sharply between 2006 to 2008 with 60, 75, and 85
students
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, until
jumped
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 in a year with 160
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 in 2009.
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,
for
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Greek
students
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 followed a completely different trajectory,
started
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starting
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 as the highest new
students
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 of all at 180 in 2005, and
fell
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falling
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 dramatically over the period of time to around 40
students
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 in 2009.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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