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Writing Samples
Band 2

In many cities today, most people live in large apartment blocks. Does this rule of accommodation have some advantages or disadvantages?

In many cities today, since most
people
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 live in large
apartment
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block
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blocks
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, they
fase
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face
some challenges. On the other
hands
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hand
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, there are a number of positive
impact
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 on
people
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. It is much
more
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easier to make friends. So
people
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 who live in
apartments
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 can make a huge friend circle.
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Furthermore
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apartments
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 provide them a great
high
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level of security.
At
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 today’s
conditions
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conditions,
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people
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 have to think about
the
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security. So
because
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, because
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 of that
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apartments
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, apartments
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 are a good choice.
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, living
large
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in large
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apartment
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 blocks
also
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 brought disadvantages. One of these is
lack
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a lack
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 of space.
Apartments
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 cover a limited
are
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area
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, because of that you sometimes need much more
place
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space
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.
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, because houses are very close, it can be much
more noisy
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noisier
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. And
also
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 there is
not
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any
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no
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 private outdoor area. Some
people
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 like planting. Lack of area
make
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makes
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 them feel a little bit upset In conclusion, it can be seen that living in
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apartment
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an apartment
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 is
a
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an
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 exciting
think
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 that you can easily make friends, know many
people
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 and make a strong
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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.
However
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, living in
large
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a large
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apartment
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 is
also
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 capable of being challenging
due to
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it
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hasdifferent
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different
 conditions from
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apply
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traditional houses.

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organization
Work on a clear intro, body, and conclusion. Start with a general statement, then state your view.
grammar
Use simple, correct grammar. Check verb forms and subject-verb agreement.
content
Give one main idea per paragraph and add a clear example.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas fit, like 'however', 'also', 'furthermore'.
task response
The essay shows a view on both sides of the topic.
coherence
There are tries to give reason for the points.
vocabulary
Some lines talk about why living in blocks can be better.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • large apartment blocks
  • affordable
  • amenities
  • facilities
  • sense of community
  • security
  • public transportation
  • maintenance responsibilities
  • social interaction
  • networking
  • urban lifestyle
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • privacy
  • personal space
  • noise
  • disturbances
  • neighbors
  • outdoor space
  • green areas
  • cramped living conditions
  • dependency
  • management
  • regulations
  • parking spaces
  • individuality
  • customization
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