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Writing Samples
Band 1

Some people believe that as internet access becomes widespread,traditional libraries will become obsolete.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that
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unternet
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internet
 has transformed how people access
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information
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 some to believe that traditional
libraries
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 will soon disappear.
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 completely
desagree
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disagree
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 view,as
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 continue to play an essential role in education and community life.
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,
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 provide a quiet and focused environment that cannot be easily replicated online.Many students and professionals rely on
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 study without distraction .
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contrast
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 the internet often exposes users to constant
notification
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 and advertisements,which can reduce concentration.
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,
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 remain ideal places for deep reading and learning.
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,
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 serve important social and educational functions.Many
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 as those in
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,
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 free workshops,film
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screenings
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,and volunteer programs that
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bring communities
 together.These
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 are especially valuable for
new comers
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newcomers
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 and immigrants who need opportunities
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to connect and learn in person. In conclusion,
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 the internet has made information more
accessible
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accessible,
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 traditional
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 remain irreplaceable
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they continue to foster learning,social interaction,and equal access to knowledge for everyone

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language
Fix miss and bad spell. Use short, simple words. Check each sentence for space and mark.
structure
Make a short plan before you write: intro, two body parts, and a short end.
structure
In each para, start with a clear idea. Then give a reason and one example. End with why it matters.
coherence
Use more smooth link words and keep ideas in order so the text flows.
grammar
Check grammar and keep to a pattern of simple sentence, not long joins.
content
You show a clear view that you disagree.
structure
You use 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'In conclusion' to plan the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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