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Writing Samples
Band 3

Both Rich and poor find it difficult to accessibility to university education.Do you agree or disagree

Recently, there
is
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has been
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 a hot debate both wealthy and impoverished people
are
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should be
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 challenging to
get in
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access
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the
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apply
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tertiary
education
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. In my opinion, I
agreed
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 with
this
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 statement as the academic result is
most
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the most
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concern
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concerning
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 part of entering the
university
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. Entering the
university
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 depends on
the
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apply
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personal ability
but
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, but
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 not really related to
the
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apply
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wealth and income that you get. First of all, there is more intense competition in
the
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apply
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society for getting
the
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a
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 position
on
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at
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 the
university
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. In the past, destitute
students
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 may not have
enough
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had enough
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 money for the institution. But
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the governement
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governement
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government
 has been
provided
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providing
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 funding and support to the needy, so it provides
a
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more equal opportunities for all
students
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 to enter the
university
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.
With
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As
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 more people are qualified, the competitiveness of the
students
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are
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is
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 being more strong. They are aiming to achieve higher in their
academic
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academics
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for
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to strive for
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striving
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apply
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better jobs in the community.
Therefore
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, it is harder for both poor and rich
leaners
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learners
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 to access the
universit
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university
 now.
Furthermore
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, the requirement of stepping the foot on
the
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apply
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tertiary
education
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 is more
depending
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dependent
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 on the academic outcomes, ability and skills, rather than how
many
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much
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 money
that
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apply
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you
get
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get,
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 as
university
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 needs to find the top
students
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 for their
education
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 and
researching
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research
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. In conclusion, it is noticed that the wealth of the
students
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 is not the main concern of entering
the
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a
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tertiary institution. With the higher
competiveness
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competitiveness
 and equal chances, the accessibility to
university
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education
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 is becoming more challenging.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear path: one view, reasons, and a simple example for each point.
coherence
Make sure each paragraph has a main idea and a link to the next idea.
accuracy
Use simple grammar and check the verb and noun in each sentence.
idea
The essay has a clear view that money is not the main factor.
content
Some ideas stay on topic, like the role of funding for poor students.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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