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Band 3

Many countries want to host international sports event, while other countries think that hosting sports events has some problems that benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.(

In my point of view, I think that
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both
countries
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 want to host international
sports
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event
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events
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 and other
countries
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 think that
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hase
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have
 some problems are right .
Firstly
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, in order to host international
sport
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sports
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events
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 like
world
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World
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waid cups
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Cup
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, swimming
events
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,or
body building
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bodybuilding
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 challenges, the government need to
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 a lot of preparations .
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streets ,hotels and the places of
events
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 . So, if the
cites
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 that
events
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 happened in
ready
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are ready
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 for the
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events
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events,
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 it
well
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 be beneficial for the country.
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, I tend to believe that not all
countries
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 can
do
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host
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the
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sports
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events
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.
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, there are many conditions from the
sports
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insititutions
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institutions
 for having the
events
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 .
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, the
countries
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how
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 have zero services for people how
attaineding
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attending
 the
events
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 ,or they have no security
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 not accepted to
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accept
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 it .
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, there are a lot of conditions to have it
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, it can be highly beneficial for the economy .
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 ,open opportunities to through similar
events
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 , to
wining
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win
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 the competitions ,and to create
a
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champions
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.
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 , it
is
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 possibly increased the
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countries
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country's
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 income and development.
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overall
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, the benefits are higher than the disadvantages . In conclusion, hosting international
sports
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events
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have
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 become
in
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 issue for many
countries
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 . Because of
,
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weekly preparations or poor
countries
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 .
In
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 the other aside , it can be very good for the other
countries
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how
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has
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have
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 the ability to do it .

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grammar
Improve the grammar and sentence form to make ideas clear and easy to read.
structure
Make a short clear opening that shows your view and a simple closing that restates it.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are related and make the order clear.
content
The essay shows an attempt to discuss both views.
content
It mentions real events like world cups and the economy to support ideas.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • National pride
  • Fosters
  • International relations
  • Bolsters
  • Economic gains
  • Economic burden
  • Long-term debt
  • Infrastructure improvements
  • Cultural exchange
  • Mutual understanding
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon footprint
  • Commercialization
  • Gentrification
  • Displacing
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