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The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.

The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.
The line graph shows the comparison of population between India and China from 2000 with predictions towards
to
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2050.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that
two
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the two
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 lines once experienced
same
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the same
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 amount of population in the middle of
year’s
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the year’s
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 evaluation.
In addition
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, it is
measuring
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measured
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 in
billions
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.
Initially
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, the status in China started with 1.2-1.3
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billions
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billion
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of
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inhabitants in 2000
years
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apply
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. The line continued to
slightly grow
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grow slightly
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 until about 2025. In the following five years, the graph illustrates that the lines are going to cross paths with each other and
to
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have the same number of inhabitants (1.4
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billions
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billion
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).
However
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, lately, the population in China is expected to fall slowly over the next decades.
Moreover
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, the project presents that
citizenry’s
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the citizenry’s
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 growth in India started with 1.0
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billions
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billion
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of
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inhabitants. It is clearly seen that the quality of citizens had sharply risen to 1.4
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billions
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billion
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 before 2030. But in the final years, the number is anticipated to increase slowly
and
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, and
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to
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by
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 2050 it is going to up by 1.6
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billions
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billion
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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