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Writing Samples
Band 1

Do you think the environmental situation should improve in the nearest future

In mice, the team looked at how tirzepatide works in the
brain
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, in what they note as “a combination of neuroanatomical approaches.” The drug held a faint fluorescent tag and was tracked over exposed parts of the
brain
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 with
iDISCO
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the iDISCO
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 light sheet method. From there, they noted shifts in neuronal activity in different regions of the
brain
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 with whole-
brain
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 FOS analysis,
while
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 RNAscope showed where the GlP1r and Gipr receptors are. With genetic tools, they switched certain neurons on and off, and
together with
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 feeding work, linked those
brain
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 sites to appetite and weight.

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structure
Add a short opening and a closing line to show what you talk about and what you find.
coherence
Use small linking words to show how each step comes after the last.
lexis
Use plain words. Some hard terms can be replaced by easy ones.
content
The piece lists the lab work done and the flow of ideas.
style
The writing is brief and to the point.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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