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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Today, the high sales of popular consumers goods reflect the power of advertising and not real need of society in which they are sold. What extent do you agree or disagree ?

The study has a few
limits
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limitations
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. In their words, “our study recorded limited distribution after a single injection of fluorescently labelled TZP,” so the reach of the drug may differ with
latter
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 doses.
Likewise
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, their scan of brain activity relied on single-dose data, which could have skewed the result. They add that methods used to study GIPR in the rodent brain don’t quite line up, and
while
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 the area postrema takes a central role, other sites may still play a part. It was hard too to pick out the NtsCeA cells from the many around them, and their role is still open to question.

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task response
State a clear aim or view in the opening line and finish with a short conclusion to show you answer the task.
coherence cohesion
Use small, easy words and join ideas with simple links like and, but, also, so, then to guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Add 1 or 2 main ideas with short facts or examples to make your point clearer.
strength
The small text uses concrete study facts, so it makes a real point.
strength
The writing keeps a calm, neutral tone, which is good for science.
strength
There is an idea that can be built on with more points.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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