In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Over the recent years, in some countries, more students have chosen vocational training rather than pursuing a university career. From my perspective, in
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artificial intelligence (AI) driven digital era, it is fairly normal, so
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more and more
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have lost their jobs , and others are
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losing their faith in their secure financial future. In
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context, new generations realise that they should get practical skills to easily find a job. On one hand, until the AI has entered our daily life, many things have changed,
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, just a few years ago, there was an immense demand for coding-skilled citizens, especially for tech firms like Google, Meta , and Yahoo ,
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trend has changed sharply
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now many computer science workers have lost their jobs, regarding to AI takes their role.
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are
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threatened by AI, so many of them could be totally abolished.
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, over the
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two decades,
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were encouraged to pursue a university career.
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led to a reduced number of
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chosen to work as blue-collar workers.
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, in recent years, in LA, an electrician could earn $120K annually. So some students and families noticed that situation and made no effort to continue university. In conclusion, after AI changed our daily life,
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's job preferences
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changed, so many
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are looking for work-based studies for their children. As a matter of fact, society needs both of them, university-graduated citizens for academic research and
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for blue-collar workers.

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structure
Make the main view clear in the first paragraph and keep it easy to read.
coherence
Keep each paragraph to one big idea and connect ideas with simple linking words.
grammar
Fix grammar and use common words; prefer short sentences to be precise.
content
Add strong, real examples to show your point and explain why they matter.
conclusion
End with a short clear conclusion that restates your view.
ideas
The essay shows a view on the topic and uses examples.
content
There is a link between AI and job choice shown in the text.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-based training
  • enrol
  • university
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • practical skills
  • experience
  • workforce
  • employment
  • earnings
  • opportunities
  • further education
  • theoretical knowledge
  • career options
  • exploitation
  • balance
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