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Band 2.5

Some people believe, limiting the speed is the best way for the road safety, while other believe there are other ways to do this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It`s considered among individuals that
controling
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controlling
 speed on the road is the optimum method for
safty
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safety
, and some
peoples
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people
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 trust different methods. In my opinion, I
tottaly
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totally
 agree that limited velocity is the
fundamintal
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fundamental
 way for
self protection
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 in the vehicle.
However
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, the driver`s health state is important as well.
In
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 one hand, overwhelming rapidity can cause car accidents even though you have quick reactions, if you
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 concentration even for a
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this
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 may lead to
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serious casualties.
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,
over speed
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speeding is
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cosidered
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considered
violation
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a violation
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 of
community`s
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the community`s
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 law. Every car on the road should be
moniterd
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monitored
 in the case of quickness and acceleration to maintain the peace
in
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 the
paths
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roads
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.
In
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 the other hand, some assume that health state is
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dominant
 velocity to illustrate, before acquiring
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a driving
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 license
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ther
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there
 are several tests in
vission
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vision
, medical reports, and
reactions
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reaction
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swiftnesss
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speed
not
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, not
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 only on driving a vehicle as
its
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it
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 seems.
Its
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 really crucial to check those factors to avoid
such
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accedint
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accident
 sequences on the road.
in
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 conclusion, reducing the velocity and acceleration is the key to
avoid
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avoiding
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 problems because
,
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 you will get more time to act and
depend
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in
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the
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instinct
are
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also
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important
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an important
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 factor
like
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, like
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 other
peoples
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people
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 believe
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as
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, as
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 well as
prper visson
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proper vision
 and optimum state.

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structure
State your view clearly in the introduction and restate it in the conclusion to show a full view of the topic.
coherence
Use simple linking words (but, and, then, however) to connect ideas and make the order clearer.
content
Explain each idea with a bit more detail and avoid short, vague sentences.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar (controlling, safety, monitored) to make the writing correct.
lexical
Use common words and simple phrases to keep the language easy to read.
content
The writer tries to cover both sides of the issue.
content
An opinion is given at the end.
structure
There is a plan for the topic and some related ideas are used.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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