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Band 4

Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many
people
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agrued
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argued
 that
people
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looking
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been looking
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a
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for a
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job
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 for
long
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a long
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 time should do voluntary
work
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 for
sociel
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society
, meanwhile they are
reciept
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receiving
 benefits from
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the government
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. In
this
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describe
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 topic with my reasons and
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demonstate
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demonstrate
 to support my view. First of all, many
people
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do
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apply
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jobless
has
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people has
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increasing
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 in
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modern
 society because
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the population
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 have
grow
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up
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apply
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repidly
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rapidly
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take
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 slower and
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people
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move
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in to
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into
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 the
bussiness
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business
 area
everyday
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every day
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.
these
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 can be the main
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points
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 to find
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a
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job
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easiely
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easily
, so they might
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do
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a volunteir
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volunteir
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volunteer
job
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 to give
theirself
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themselves
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 more
chance
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chances
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 to get
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job
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a job
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. On the another hand, many
people
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active
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are active
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 themself and need only
government
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the government
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 to support them that because some of them might not know where they should start
or
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, or
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it
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they
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 might
have not
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not have
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avialable
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available
 to
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suit
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but
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this
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disappoint
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from
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for
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people
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 who are looking for staff in the community
voluntier
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volunteer
 worker. They are not thinking about their future or lazy to do some
work
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. In my opinion, I agree with
people
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 who think that long-term seeker should do
voluntory
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voluntary
work
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 to give something back
for
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to
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 the community to improve themself in many task
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such
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, such
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 as relationship,
exprerience
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experience
,
skill
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and skill
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and
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, and
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also
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 they will have more contact
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people
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with people
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 who can give them
some
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a
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job
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 in the future. In conclusion,
people
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 who
do
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are
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 jobless should
do
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apply
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work
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 to give something back to
community
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the community
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 rather than
need
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rely
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 support
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the for
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for government
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government for
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 only.
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 can show that those
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 have more responsibility to
work
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 more than
people
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 who do nothing.

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task achievement
Add one main idea per paragraph and give a simple reason and an example.
coherence
Use a short intro and a short conclusion that restate your view.
coherence
Use linking words (and, but, so, therefore) to show how ideas are connected.
linguistic
Check spelling and grammar. Use common words and simple sentences.
content
Use 1 or 2 personal or real examples to back up points.
task achievement
Clear view in the final sentence.
coherence
There are some connected ideas in places.
content
Topic is relevant and there is an attempt to discuss it.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Long-term job seekers
  • Government benefits
  • Voluntary work
  • Community service
  • Employability
  • Sense of purpose
  • Mental health
  • Stigma
  • Unemployed
  • Public funds
  • Positively impact
  • Community
  • Exploit
  • Vulnerable individuals
  • Devalue
  • Volunteerism
  • Informal contributions
  • Skill-matching
  • Beneficial and fulfilling
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