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Some people are strongly against social media and believe that it should be limited because it has negative effects on individuals and society. Why do some people hold this view? Do you agree or disagree?

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 consider social
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 believe that it has to be limited,
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 disagree with that , and it's more useful and assists our daily
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 because it has positive effects On one hand,
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 prefer social
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 because it helps us in our daily
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 as communicating with
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 or watching the news or even studying for a test
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 makes content and makes a lot of money With social
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apps
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, we should be more careful and control the time we spend on them But
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 with social
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apps
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, we can improve our communication skills and make a lot of
friends
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 or even learn new skills
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 I learned
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 language and practised it with my
friends
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 met on social
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apps
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on the other hand
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,
people
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 disgree and believe that social
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 have to be limited for many reasons the first one is its wasting our daily
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 for nothing or the harmful things that can change
people
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 mind example for that there a lot of
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 who just sit and scroll videos in social
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apps
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 or believe fake news
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 may lose foucs on school or collage and find makeing new
friends
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 in real
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 difficult
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 low skills on communication with other
people
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also
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 can't control their time on social
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, social
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 is good for some
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use it correctly, and learn more about their selfs.I agree that social
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 is useful as much we can control it.

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structure
Plan your ideas first. Write a clear intro, two sides, and a short ending that states your view.
coherence
Use linking words to show contrast and addition, like 'on one hand... on the other hand...', 'also', 'but', 'however'.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Check verb tense and subject-verb agreement.
task response
Give a clear opinion in the end and support it with one or two simple examples.
content
The essay discusses both sides.
coherence
Some effort to link ideas with examples.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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