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the graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant

the graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant
The line graph illustrates the total number of
tourist
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tourists
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 who visit European
country
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countries
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 from three different
focus
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focuses
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, which are the
coast
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, the mountains, and the
lakes
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from
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, from
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 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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,
It
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it
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 is evident that the
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coast
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coastal
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area
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 is more popular among visitors from
beginning
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the beginning
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, even though the unpopular one, which is the
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lakes
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lakes,
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 had a moment to surpass the
coast
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 once in a
while
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, but it ended with
tragic
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a tragic
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 decrease. Meanwhile, the mountain
area
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kept
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apply
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remain
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remained
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 stable and steadily
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increase
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increased
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 throughout the period of time.
To begin
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 with, the least number of foreign people to visit in Europe is the
lakes
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area
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, which
is
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apply
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started at 10,000 in 1987. The
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lakes visitor
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number of lake visitors
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are
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apply
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rose sharply until
experienced
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it experienced
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 a significant
increase
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 in 2002 at 75 thousands of people, and after that, it had a sudden decrease
with
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to
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 only 50,000
at
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in
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 2007. Whilst
,
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apply
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 the
coast
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 started as the famous one with 40,000 in 1987, and jumped down in 1992 at around 35,000.
However
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,
since
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from
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 1992
until
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to
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 2007, the
coast
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 remained
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increase
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increasing
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 until
reached
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it reached
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 its peak in 2007 at around 75,000.
On the other hand
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, the
mountains
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mountain
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area
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begin
Wrong verb form
began
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 with 20 thousands at 1987, and
kept
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apply
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remained stable and steadily
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increase
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increased
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 until
2007
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2007,
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 at around 30,000
tourist
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tourists
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, lakes, area, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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