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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned from the city center. People are encouraged to use public transportation such as buses, taxis and metro on vehicle-free days. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

This
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vehicle free
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days
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 in large
cities
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while
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 it is
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 problem that
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congestion
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big
cities
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 ,some
cities
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 have
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vehicle free
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days
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 when private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned from the city
center
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 to solve that problem.
the
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 advantages are more than
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the disadvantages
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. Because of many reasons,
first
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 it is a solution for
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congestion
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 in large
cities
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it's
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kind
 of
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 for
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 control from
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the government
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 .
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, in past
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 people had many issues with
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 going to work ,
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,or finishing important tasks . It was very hard for individuals .
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a lot of cars driving
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the same time . So , it becomes a very busy
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 , the
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 department set these
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 special occasions or special
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days
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 they stop the trucks and motorcycles from moving. To limit the
traffic
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 flow and reduce
traffic
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congestion
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, citizens get to move anywhere easily. In conclusion,the benefits of the
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vehicle free
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days
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
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traffic
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the traffic
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 department fixed one of the biggest problems
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 is
traffic
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congestion
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 in the country. Through
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 the regulation of transport times and rules
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 of them is
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vehicle free
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days
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,I hope the government can take action towards the
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 problems and find
way
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a way
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 to control the movement in the important areas for people to have
better
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a better
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 life.

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Task response
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro that says your view. Then give two or three points for and against and finish with a clear end.
Coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph and use clear links between ideas.
Task response
Give real examples or small facts to back up your points.
General language
Check spelling and grammar so the read is easy.
Task response
The essay shows a clear view that vehicle-free days can be good for a city.
Coherence and cohesion
The writing shows aim to talk about how rules can cut traffic.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vehicle-free days
  • public transport
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • sustainable
  • healthier lifestyles
  • obesity
  • foot traffic
  • community engagement
  • logistical challenges
  • banning vehicles
  • supply chain issues
  • pedestrian-friendly
  • urban planning
  • environmental benefits
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