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Band 2.5

The plants show a student common room from five years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whererelevant.

The two maps illustrate the main changes which have taken place in the common
room
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 for students between the year 2020 and today.
Overall
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, what stands out from the maps is that the
room
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 now includes more facilities than five years ago. Five years ago, the
room
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 looked very simple. On the north side of the
room
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 were a cupboard, sink, benches, microwave and refrigerator.
Furthermore
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, there were four round tables, each of which had six red chairs. Currently, the
room
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 looks extremely different despite things which did not change. The north side of the
room
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 stayed the same , and two round tables. One of the round tables turned into
rectangular
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a rectangular
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 table with 10 chairs. On the south side of the
room
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,
introduced
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an introduced
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 bench for laptops. In the right corner of the
room
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, armchairs and a TV were added.

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grammar
Fix small grammar and word form errors, for example 'despite things which did not change' and 'rectangular table'.
structure
Use a clear plan: intro, overview, then paragraph about old room and new room, then a direct compare.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'however' to show links from old to new and to compare.
task response
Be exact with numbers and items (how many tables, chairs, etc).
conclusion
End with a short, clear sentence to sum up the change.
task response
The answer shows the big change: more items in the room now.
coherence
Details on what was in the north side and what is now clear.
coherence
The idea of time order (old then new) helps the reader.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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