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Nowadays, many people travel to foreign countries for holidays. Why is it the case? Is this a positive or negative development for the countries they travel to?

There is an increasing popularity of travelling abroad for holidays these days.
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 is a reasonable change from the past state. But are there any benefits from it for the popular tourist
countries
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? I believe so, and will try to explain my view. Visiting foreign
countries
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 became
much
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a much
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 more
accessable
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accessible
 type of
recriation
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recreation
.
Firstly
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, the revolution of communication systems between different
countries
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 and even continents has
happened
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occurred
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. It will take less than a day to travel overseas on a plane, which previously could
lasts
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last
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 for months
in
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on
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 a ship. New trains are
also
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 much faster than their first prototypes. Travelling transformed from a long, expensive and exhausting activity to a new one: faster,
cheapier
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cheaper
 and easier. It really contributed to the way
people
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percieve
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perceive
 travelling and exploring new places, making it more interesting and desirable spending of
a
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apply
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time, or even a hobby. Why
it
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does it
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effects
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affect
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 well on the
countries
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people
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 mostly visit? One benefit from it is the huge income
from
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apply
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from tourists.
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 even some
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,
for example
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 Italy and Greece, where
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the govermental
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govermental
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governmental
 budget consists mostly of
this
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 money. An additional advantage is
increasing
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an increase in
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inerest
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interest
 for the local culture by
people
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 worldwide.
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,
people
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 can exchange their cultures, embrace their worldview and learn new things.
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 is
benefitial
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beneficial
 not only for
country
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the country
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 itself, but for the foreigners too. In summary, the technological development of transport helped
people
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 to travel more. And
this
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, in turn, helps
to
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apply
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the development of
touristic
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tourist
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countries
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.

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task response
Make your answer clear. Start by stating if this trend is good or bad for host countries. Then add 2 strong reasons and short, simple examples.
coherence
Use a clear flow. Begin each paragraph with a topic sentence about one point, then give details. Use simple link words like first, also, but, for example.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Correct common mistakes such as accessable, recreation, government, beneficial, and other errors.
content
Give more exact examples from different places. Talk about money, jobs, culture, and the environment. Avoid only general talk, and be precise.
content
The essay shows a clear idea that travel brings money to tourist spots.
example
Two places are named as examples (Italy and Greece).
structure
There is a beginning, body and end in the writing.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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