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Band 3

Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on soiety?

In the modern era of the world,
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technology has developed significantly
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robots
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 and AI
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alot
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a lot
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. In my opinion, I partially agree that some
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jobs
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robots
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 and others by humans.
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 companies and any other occupational area want to improve their services and maintain their financial matter and
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 the budget.
therfore
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,
employes
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that
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 can be replaced by
a
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robots
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 or AI, the company will be pleased to replace the
employer
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 in order to reduce the cost
on
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 their funding.
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apps developer
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app developers
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now can
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can now
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 be done by
artfical
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artificial
 intelligence, so there is no need for an employer that can cost the company and may not be
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 partner.
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as
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 a result of that, the
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job
 can be done quicker without
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losing
 much money.
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, some
workplaces
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 can be done in a better way by humans,
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 medical
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.
Alot
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A lot
 of people cannot trust a machine for their life and would be more
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 if a professional doctor
would be
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 responsible for the surgery
instead
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 of a machine.
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 studies show that surgical
robots
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 may make a medical error if
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 not well programmed for irregular cases, so people would trust a human over an
insturment
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instrument
 made for surgeries. In conclusion,
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artificial intelligence is a profitable choice, but
cannot
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it cannot
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 be used in every area
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 some
professons
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professions
 are not made for bots.

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task
Make your view clear in the first part and finish with a short conclusion that restates it. Use two or three clear reasons with simple examples.
coherence
grammar
Check small spell and word form, fix repeated misspells and keep to common words in top 100. This will help the flow and reduce mistakes.
content
You give a view and some effort to explain it.
stance
There are real ideas about robots and doctors.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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