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There have been many inventions in human history such as the wheel. Some people think the most important invention in our globe is the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There are many inventions in human history
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such
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 as the wheel, engines and so on. Some people think the most important invention in our
globe
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world
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 is the
Internet
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. I really agree with
this
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 statement, and
actually
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 it changes the life of individuals.
First,
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we can connect everywhere using the
Internet
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.
For example
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, we couldn’t be detached from devices
such
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 as phones or desktops.
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Internet
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The Internet
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 is
the
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a
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 type of global
networks
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network
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so
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, so
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 it would be used with
the
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apply
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storage which contains
the
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technology to link with others.
Hence
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, the development of the
internet
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 goes with the surge of
technology
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technological
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 improvement.
To begin
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 with
this
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 wave, the connection tools named social network services
such
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 as Instagram, Facebook, and
Youtube
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YouTube
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has
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have
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 been expanded recently.
Second,
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the
Internet
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 plays a key role
for
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in
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 our relationships nowadays.
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, our children are not making friends in offline conditions as they are too busy
to
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relating to
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relate
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apply
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others.
While
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 in the past, we should
take
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have taken
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 the offline methods for meeting and making
friendships
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friends
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. In
this
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 context, the
Internet
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maximizes
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maximises
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 the points of
the
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apply
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human life, especially in connecting ways. From
past
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the past
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 to
future
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the future
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, I believe
this
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 invention is the most significant in our
periods
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period
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.

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task
Plan a short intro that clearly says you agree. Then give two or three ideas in order, each in its own paragraph.
task
In each body paragraph, give a reason and a clear example. End with a short conclusion that sums your view.
coherence
Use clear start sentences for each paragraph and join ideas with simple words.
language
Check grammar and use easy words. Use short sentences.
content
Shows a clear view that the Internet is very important.
structure
Uses order words like First and Second to show points.
content
Gives easy examples like social apps to support the idea.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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