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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. • Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. • Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts give information about
reasons
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the reasons
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of
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for
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people
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's
travelling
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travel
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 preferences, including
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
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car
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cars
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, when they go to
work
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.
Overall
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, the percentages of
people
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 who prefer cycling for health and fitness and less pollution to go to
work
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 are the same and the two biggest
propotion
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proportions
.
However
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, the percentage of
people
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 who prefer driving because of comfort to go to
work
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 is the biggest pie. The
sections
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number
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 of
the
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apply
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people
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 who cycle to
work
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due to
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 health and fitness and less pollution
are
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is
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 the same
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, with
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with
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at
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 30%.
Moreover
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, 15%
people
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 go to
work
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 by bicycle because of no parking problems. The smallest segment belongs to
people
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 who go to
work
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 by bicycle because they consider cycling
is
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 faster than driving. 40% of
people
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 who go to
work
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 by
car
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due to
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 comfort, and 21% of them prefer to drive because of
distance
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the distance
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 to
work
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.
In contrast
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, only 11% of
people
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 think that driving is safer than cycling
and
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, and
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 they prefer to drive to go to
work
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.
Finally
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, the percentage of
people
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 who go to
work
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 by
car
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 because they believe driving
faster
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is faster
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 than cycling
are
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is
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 equal
the
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to the
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 percentage of
people
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 who go to
work
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 by
car
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 because they need to carry things to
work
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, with 14%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, car, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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