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Do you think consumer should avoid over packed products or is it the responsibility of producers to avoid extra over packing products? Give your view or any relevant example with your own experiences.

Nowadays, there is an ongoing debate about over-packed
products
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. Some people believe that companies should take responsibility for reducing unnecessary packaging,
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 others think that
consumers
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 should avoid buying
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products
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. In my opinion, with careful attention from both sides, the problem of over-packed
products
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 can be reduced. First of all, many people are not aware of how many
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products
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 are consumed every day.
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 is not only harmful to their health but
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 to the environment. There is a huge amount of plastic packaging, and
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 causes serious pollution problems.
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, in many supermarkets, even fruits like bananas or oranges are sold in plastic boxes,
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 they don’t really need any packaging. If companies used simple or recyclable materials, the amount of waste would be reduced significantly.
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,
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 can
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 play a key role by making more environmentally conscious decisions.
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, they can bring their own reusable bags when shopping, avoid
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 wrapped in several layers of plastic, and prefer items with biodegradable or paper packaging. When a large number of
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 adopt
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 habits, it sends a clear message to producers that sustainable packaging is not just appreciated but expected. In conclusion, both
consumers
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 and producers share the responsibility for reducing over-packed
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.
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 individuals can make more eco-friendly choices, companies have greater control over production and materials.

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structure
Make your ideas link with clear chains. Use linking words like first, also, however, and in addition to guide the reader.
content
Give more depth to each idea. Add one more detail for each point or a short reason to show why it matters.
task response
Be more exact in the start. State your view with a strong sentence in the intro and restate it in the end.
vocabulary
Watch word choice. Use simple, common words and short phrases. Do not repeat the same idea too often.
examples
Try one longer example to back up a point. This could be a small real fact or a clear scene.
content strength
Clear purpose with a balanced view.
content strength
Good examples that show the issue.
structure strength
Easy to follow structure: intro, body, conclusion.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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