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One long-distance flight consumes fuel which a car uses in several years's time,but they cause the amount of time polution. So some people think that we should discourage non-essesntial flights, such as tourist travel, rather than to limit the use of cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a debate over how
decrease
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 the amount of
pollution
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, with some saying long-distance
flight
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 consumes the
fuel
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 , which
cars
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 can
use
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 for several years
,
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however
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however,
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 their influence on air
pollotuion
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pollution
 is the same
, others
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. Others
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 argue that
not
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apply
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necessary
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unnecessary
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 flights should be declined
instead
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 of limiting the
usage
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 of
cars
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.
Cars
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 and planes have the same quantity of
pollution
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, despite of
cars
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 can
use
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fuel
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 for several years, which is used
to
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only once for
long-distance
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a long-distance
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flight
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.Decreasing the
number
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 of
unnessary
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unnecessary
 flights,
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 as tourist
travel
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travel,
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 can help to save
resuourses
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resources
 like
a
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apply
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oil
which
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, which
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 is used to produce petrol. So, declining the
number
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non-essential
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of non-essential
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flight
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flights
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 can be more efficient as it saves the amount of
fuels
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fuel
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 and
pollution
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also
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.
Therefore
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, the
number
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 of
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flight
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flights
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 should be decreased as it
more
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is more
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productivity
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productive
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 compared to
cars
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.  Limiting the
use
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 of
cars
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 is not
good
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a good
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 solution, as it counts
one
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as one
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 of the most important
vehicle
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vehicles
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 in
peoples'
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people's
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 daily life. Nowadays, there are
electronic
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electric
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cars
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, which
are
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do
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 not produce gas
emmisions
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emissions
 and
does
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do
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 not require
fuel
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 in order to move.So,
instead
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 of limiting the
usage
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 of
cars
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,
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the goverenment
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goverenment
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government
 should encourage people to
use
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 alternative
cars
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, like
electronic
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electric
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 which
is
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are
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 not harmful
for
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to
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the&nbsp
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the
;
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apply
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 environment. The
fuel
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 of electric
cars
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 is electricity, which is
renewable
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a renewable
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resourse amd
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resource and
 it is
more
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apply
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cheaper
which
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, which
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 is important for drivers to reduce their extra expenses.
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,
instead
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 of limiting the car
usage
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 ,
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the goverenment
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goverenment
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government
 should
encoruage
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encourage
 people to
alternative
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use alternative
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 options.  All things considered, decreasing the
number
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 of unnessary flights is more effective to save
fuel
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 and
pollution
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, as
instead
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 of limiting the
usage
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 of
cars
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 as it has alternative options. 

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task response
Make your view clear in the first line. Say if you agree or not and how far.
structure
Plan before you write. Use three parts: intro, two or three body paragraphs, and a short end.
language
Use simple but correct spell and form. Check common word errors.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas connect.
task response
The essay talks about both flights and cars and shows you think on the topic.
content
You bring up new idea of electric cars.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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