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Many students today graduate high school and want to continue their studies overseas. There are both pros and cons for studying abroad. Give the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

The society has changed since the past.
Nowadays
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 99% of the international
students
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 are looking forward to
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 their education in another country.
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, they are unaware of the benefits and issues of
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 decision.
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 essay will give the
advantages
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 and disadvantages of studying abroad. On the one hand, there are multiple
advantages
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 to studying abroad.
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 the
students
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 today are more educated compared with
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older
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 generations.
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 that’s why most of them
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are dreaming
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 about studying abroad for higher degrees. and that holds several
advantages
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.
First
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students
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 who studied abroad
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have
career chances more
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more career chances
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 than anyone else.
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second,
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 the
students
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 who have completed their education in another country the skills of foreign
language
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 developed easily compared with those who studied in their homeland. Many people support
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 idea.
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, there are numerous problems that
students
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 may experience when studying abroad. One of the common problems is
language
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 difficulties. Many international
students
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 have an issue with the foreign
language
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even
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, even
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 if they are fluent in it.
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, they may have trouble
to understand
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understanding
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 the slang words even if it’s easy and
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well-known
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. Many of them may be fluent in the academic style of the
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but
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 they will face some challenges to understand the locals.The second popular issue is
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financial struggles.
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,On of the most common reasons is
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that many
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 of them
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have never
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 had a job before. Because most
students
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 are under the age
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of 21
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 .
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 some of them have financial dependence on their parents. Most of them fail to manage their own budget.
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, one of the common
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 is communication. Most of the
students
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 feel uncomfortable
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starting
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 a daily conversation with
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someone
 who
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was raisde
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raisde
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raised
 in
different
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a different
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 state or culture. In
conclusian
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conclusion
,
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it is
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 very clear to notice both
of sides
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sides of
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 the
advantages
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 and the disadvantages of studying abroad and what
will
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international
students
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 may face in
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reality.
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, today's youth are aware
to
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of
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 their
lifes
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lives
 and goals. They are more open to the world and can recognise the multiple
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of
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benifets
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benefits
 and issues.

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coherence
Plan your essay. Start with a clear idea and a short answer in your intro, then write one idea per paragraph with a main sentence.
grammar
Use short and clear sentences. Many lines are long and slow the flow.
content
Explain each point with a reason. Add reasons and simple facts to back them up.
grammar
Fix spelling and punctuation. Capitalize proper nouns and start sentences with a capital letter.
structure
End with a short conclusion restating your view and the main ideas.
content
The essay shows that you can talk about both sides.
content
You bring up good ideas like the job chance and the language skill.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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