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Should schools focus more on practical skills or academic knowledge give your opinion

Both practical skills and academic knowledge are equally essential. The importance of them results in many aspects
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 our life.
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, having the ability to excel in what you’re asked to do or even do the job as it’s required is extremely vital. The line chart below illustrates the average carbon dioxide emissions per individual in four nations: the UK,
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, Italy, and Portugal
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 from 1967 to 2007.
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, it is evident that two out of four countries: the UK
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 and
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. displayed a downward trend.
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, Italy and Portugal were nations with an increase in average CO2 emissions throughout the period. Displaying an opposite drift
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 and Italy, out of all the countries,
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 CO2 emissions
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 Italy’s average rose from around 4 than it twiced to nearly 8 in 1997.
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, the direction remained relatively stable from 1997 to 2007 with the same average just below 8.
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, Portugal showed an upward drift, increasing significantly almost six times more than its first average. At the beginning of the period, all the other countries
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experienced a decrease. The United Kingdom average was almost consistent for a decade , with around 11
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 contrast, it gradually reduced to almost 7
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,
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 increased from almost 7 to just below 11.
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,
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 it dropped substantially. Eventually, both
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 and Portugal reached the same level by the end of the period , with just over 5.

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structure
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and keep it in all your writing.
task
Stick to one task. If you write about the chart, do not put too much about other topic.
content
Add exact data or clear trends from the chart to support points.
cohesion
Use simple linking words to move ideas, like and, but, so, then.
grammar
Check grammar and word order, and fix mistakes that break sense.
attempt
Effort to talk about both skills and the chart.
content
Some effort to describe data from the chart.
structure
Basic plan with an intro, body and a closing idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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