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Band 3.5

Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values). Describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health.

The graph illustrates changes in acid levels in the mouth after consuming three types of
sugar
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—fruit
sugar
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,
cane
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sugar
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, and honey—over a 40-minute period.
Overall
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, all three sugars cause a drop in
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ph
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pH
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 after consumption. In general,
cane
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sugar
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 leads to the lowest
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ph
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pH
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 levels,
while
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 honey results in the shortest acid spike. In terms of fruit
sugar
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 and
cane
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sugar
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, the
pH
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 for the former drops to around 4.5 at 5
minutes
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,
then
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 rises steadily, returning to
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ph
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pH
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 7 by 35
minutes
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.
In contrast
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,
cane
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sugar
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 causes a more dramatic drop,
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 the lowest value of almost
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ph
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pH
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 3.5. It
then
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 rises gradually, taking 40
minutes
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 to return to neutral. Regarding honey, its
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ph
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pH
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 decline is the least severe, dropping to around 4.8 at 5
minutes
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,
then
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 rising quickly and returning to neutral by 25
minutes
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. Compared with others, honey is the least harmful, causing a milder and shorter acid spike.

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content
Add a short note on how the graph link to teeth health.
language
Keep the word pH with capital H every time.
structure
Use one clear plan: start with an intro, give an overview, then write a part for each sugar, and finish with a short idea.
coherence
Use more linking words to show how ideas are connected.
content
Clear view of all three sugars and the time shown.
content
Uses exact time points and numbers.
structure
Well organized into parts for each sugar.
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