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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and estimated word iliteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and estimated word iliteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year
The graph compares the percentage of estimated
illiteracy
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rates
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 in different regions of the world and between
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females
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 in the
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 year. Generally, the
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rates
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 for
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 in the world were higher than those for males. Both genders ranked
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first in South
Asia
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 and lowest in Developed Countries. For genders,
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rates
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 of
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 account for 35% in South
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 ,which was three times the
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 in Latin America. The highest figure was around 55% for females in South
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 and the lowest was about 3% in Developed Countries. In East
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, the rate of female gots figure
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around 20%, double that for the rate of
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. In regions, the
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rates
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 accounted for over 20% in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
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, which was higher than those in the rest of
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. The rate in
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 was lowest , at approximately 2% and 3% for males and females, respectively.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rates, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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