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Question: In order to alive traffic problems, government should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportlong. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Due to
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 increasing traffic problems, some people
things
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think
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 that
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government
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the government
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 should put
some
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a
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healty
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healthy
 amount of tax on
car
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 owners and authorities can
improved
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improve
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public
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the public
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 transport system by using that money. There are
few
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a few
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 pros and cons of
this
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 system
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such
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, such
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 as reducing
burden
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the burden
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 on
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government's
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the government's
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 budgets and
reduction
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a reduction
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 in air and
noise
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 pollution
, on
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. On
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 the other
hands
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hand
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,
this
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 is
bad
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a bad
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 idea for
individuals'income
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individuals
. There are many positive effects if
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government
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the government
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 impose
good
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a good
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 amount of
taxes
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 on
car
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 users. First of all, getting
taxes
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 from
car
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 owners can be used for improving public transport
like
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, like
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 adding more buses and
maitaining
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maintaining
there
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their
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 services on
regular
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a regular
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 basis , resultantly
this
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 can
reduces
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reduction
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 the road accidents .
Secondly
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, if
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government
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the government
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put
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puts
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 these
taxes
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,
this
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 can reduce the number of private
car
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owner
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owners
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,
that
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which
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 could be good for
environment
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the environment
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 as well by reducing air and
noise
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 pollution.
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, there are some serious
impact
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impacts
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 on individuals , like
big
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a large
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 amount of money can put
burden
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a burden
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 on
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car
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a car
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 owner's income, as they are already paying for insurance, petrol/ diesel charges.
Secondly
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, as
this
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 may put
alot
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a lot
 of burden on public transport by increasing the number of consumers,
so
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apply
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to reduce
such
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impacts
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impacts,
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initially
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government
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 should provide more public bus service and routes. In conclusion, in my opinion, if
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government
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the government
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put
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puts
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taxes
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 on
car
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 owners have more negative impacts
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such
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, such
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 as financial burdens and
lack
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a lack
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 of
proper
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a proper
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 current public transportation system, as there are many other ways to reduce air and
noise
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 pollution
like
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, like
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incourageing
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encouraging
car
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-pooling and putting
noise
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 cancellation devices.

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task response
You try to show both sides of the idea, but some points are not clear or full.
grammar
Some parts are hard to read because of many grammar and spelling errors.
coherence
Link ideas with better words and keep to one idea per paragraph.
content
Give one or two clear examples to back up a point.
content
You write on both sides of the topic and end with a view.
structure
The essay has a start, body and end, which shows plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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