You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good you want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. say how you tell about his performance give details of your musical activity explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activites

Dear
Mr.
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Kim, I am writing
this
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letter to admire your
last
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night's performance. I attended your concert with my friends
which
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was held in Rogers
center
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Centre
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in Toronto. Your stage presence, vocal mastery, and ability to connect with the audience were truly remarkable.
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, you
sung
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songs with full
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energy that left
lasting
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impression on me. As a
music
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enthusiast, I have been playing different
music
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instruments,
such
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as
Guittar
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Guitar
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, Piano, and many more since 2010. I cannot only sing songs, but
also
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compose
few
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a few
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songs. In fact, I have been a member of a
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band called 'Dream Band' for the
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two years, and we primarily focus on playing pop and rock
music
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. I am sure you are terribly busy,
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I am really hoping that you would share some tips with me to enhance my
music
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skill
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.
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, I am hoping that you will find some spare time to guide
me
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me,
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that
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can help me
to
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apply
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boost my confidence and play
music
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in a different way. Thank you for your time, and I hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Rupinder Kaur.

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To make task response clear, state your goal in a simple line and say what you want from the singer, like a short lesson or tips.
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Try to keep one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a small line that shows the idea, then add detail.
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Fix small points like spelling: Guitar, Rogers Centre, and brave the commas.
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Keep a calm and polite tone. Do not boast too much; be kind and respectful.
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Add a short note on your goal with future steps, so the singer knows how to help you.
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You praise the singer’s skill and how you feel when you watch him.
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You tell about your love for music and your band work.
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You give a real place and time for the concert, which makes the letter lively.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • concert
  • singer
  • voice
  • song
  • music
  • stage
  • crowd
  • energy
  • tone
  • rhythm
  • melody
  • notes
  • guitar
  • band
  • practice
  • learn
  • help
  • feedback
  • lesson
  • meet
  • dream
  • share
  • thank
  • please
  • future
  • easy
  • clear
  • strong
  • soft
  • time
  • day
  • week
  • grow
  • guitars
  • write
  • perform
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