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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides key information about
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number
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the number
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 of males and females who
compleated
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completed
 their full-time or part-time
education
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 during three different periods of time in the United Kingdom. The units are measured in
thousands
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that part-time
education
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 was
domniant
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dominant
on
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over
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 full-time
education
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 among both men and women in all years.
In addition
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,
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number
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the number
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 of full-time women learners was nearly 700
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thousands
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thousand
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 in 1970/71,
whereas
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 it was only about 100
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thousands
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thousand
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 for
the
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apply
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full time
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full-time
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education
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.
According to
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 what
it
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apply
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is shown,
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number
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the number
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 of females who studied in part-time
education
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is
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apply
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increased from almost 700
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thousands
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thousand
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 in 1970/71 to
approximaltely
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approximately
 1100
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thousands
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thousand
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 in 1990/91. For the full-time
education
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, 1990/91 and 1980/81 showed
similar
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a similar
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number
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 of students
which
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, which
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 is about 200
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thousands
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thousand
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. In terms of men
learnign
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learning
, 1970/71 accounted for 1000
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thousands
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thousand
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 students for part-time
education
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,
in contrast
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 to full-time
education
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, where the
number
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 of students
were
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was
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 nearly 100
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thousands
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thousand
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.
However
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, their
number
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 decreased from 1000
thousands
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 to about 850
thousands
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, in 1970/71 and 1980/81, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, education, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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