The chart shows the percentage of men and women selecting professions in six various industries in the UK during 2007.

The chart shows the percentage of men and women selecting professions in six various industries in the UK during 2007.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows the percentage of men and women selecting professions in six various industries in the UK during 2007.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of males and females
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choosing careers in six different sectors in the United Kingdom in the year 2007. Looking at the
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perspectives, it is readily apparent that women were more interested in choosing their career in the sector where physical work was less required,
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men chose their career where physicality was most needed. We
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observed that both males and females participated equally in the wholesale & retail trade sector. From the perspective of women, health & social work was the top preferred profession, with 80
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,
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education and public administration &
defense
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were 70
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and 60
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, respectively. Women working in
manufacturing
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and construction industries were 25
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and 10
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, respectively, which indicated that they had low interest in those industries.
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, men’s most demanded job was construction, with a percentage of 90. After construction, manufacturing, wholesale & retail trade, and public administration &
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were the 2nd, 3rd, and 4th preferred professions, with a percentage of 70, 50, and 40, respectively. Men showed less interest in working in
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and health & social work industries.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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