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You are renting a flat from an agency. Your contract was for one year but you need to leave the flat two months early. Write a letter to the agency. In your letter * introduce yourself * ask to leave the flat before the contract finishes * explain why you need to break the contract.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about my moving out
from
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of
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 your
resident
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residence
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, which is two months earlier than the fixed contract terms.
please
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Please
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 allow me to elaborate on
this
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 matter. My name is
raj
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Raj
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 and I
had
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 been a
tentant
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tenant
 for
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last
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the last
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 nine months. I am glad that I
find
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spacious
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a spacious
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 and
quite
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quiet
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 room in your house with all the amenities
nearby
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near
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 your home. As you know, I recently graduated from university, which was six months back
and
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, and
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 fortunately, I got
the
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 Job, which is far from my current location. So, I need to relocate to the nearby location where my company is located. Surprisingly, the joining date will be immediate
,
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 I know
this
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 will be
a
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apply
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short notice, since I will be moving next week. I regret to say that I would need to break the lease agreement
which
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, which
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 is two
month
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months
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 earlier than what we signed for, that was for 1 year.
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, I have already
find
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 the replacement for me.
so
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So
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, you do not need to worry about that.
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, I would like to have my
last
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month
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month's
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 rent that I deposited with my first
month
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month's
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 rent before the beginning of the contract. I am hoping to get a prompt response from your side.
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, an open line of communication in
this
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 matter would be highly appreciated. Yours faithfully, Deepak kala

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grammar
Fix big spelling and grammar mistakes. Use 'tenant', 'move out', 'two months notice', and 'replacement tenant' in a formal way.
structure
Split the text into clear parts: one paragraph for intro, one for reason, one for action, and one for closing.
content
Be clear on what you ask and the date you will leave, and if you want the money back, say so clearly.
content
The letter shows a clear aim to leave early and gives a reason.
tone
It uses a formal tone and has a courteous closing.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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