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The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.

The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.
The chart demonstrates the diet changes in China
ranging
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, ranging
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 from 1985 to 2010.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 it can be seen that
while
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,
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 there was a steady increase
on
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in
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 both meat and fish,
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however
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salt consumption has seen a decline. As can be seen from the graph, flesh
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consumed in the diet
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 surged considerably, from 100
grams
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/
person
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week
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 to almost 200
grams
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person
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/
week
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in
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over
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 25
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years
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25-year
 span.
Nonetheless
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, usage of the salt
dimished
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diminished
 slightly from under 500
grams
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/
person
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/
week
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 to approximately 200. Looking at the trend of the seafood intake throughout the year, it slightly
inclined
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increased
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 for 5
years
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 from 1985 to 700
grams
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/
person
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week
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.
Then
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,
another 5
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over a 5-year
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years
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 span, it decreased
for
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a
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100
grams
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/
person
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week
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. Again
for
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next
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the next
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 5
years
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, it went upward to
same
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the same
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 amount (700 grmas/
person
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/
week
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). For 2010, the ingestions
was
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were
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 850 for the fish.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, person, week, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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