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Nowadays people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Now in the modern era, it`s common
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among
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 the news by using social
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. I believe that
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 the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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however
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, there are still
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considerable
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kept
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. Social
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 hse made
people
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 connected with each other more
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then
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 ever in past.
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people
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People
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 now tend to use some applications to talk.
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for
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Instagram
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 has
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 very popular in
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recent years
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people
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 tend to use it to explore the trends or for
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.
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 the users of
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 app are connected with each other
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, witch
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in results
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 talking and improving communication
skills
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for
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this
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media
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 to react with
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people
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people,
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 it will
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definitely
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to react with folks.
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,
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communicating
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 alone
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 some drawbacks as well. If someone has been relying
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media
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media,
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this
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 could affect
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. because
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apply
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 meeting
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 online is not
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coversation
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conversation
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there
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are
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 no body language or
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have
 been
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written
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, a recent study approved that conversations in real
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 and communication
skills
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alot
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a lot
 more compared to online talks. In conclusion, social
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a lot
 of
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benefits
 regarding improving communication abilities.
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 meeting
peopl
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people
 in real
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development
Plan your essay with two clear parts: advantages and disadvantages, then give your view. Add one or two simple examples to show each point.
accuracy
Use short, clear sentences and check spellings so ideas are easy to read.
coherence
Use link words to show how ideas fit together, like first, also, but, so, in addition. Keep one idea per paragraph and connect to the next.
task response
The writer shows a clear view that advantages beat the disadvantages.
cohesion
There is a clear start and end, with some linking words.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instant communication
  • Geographical separation
  • Vital sources
  • Global events
  • Networking opportunities
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Digital interactions
  • Misinformation
  • Misiformed public opinions
  • Endanger
  • Excessive use
  • Addiction
  • Mental health
  • Anxiety
  • Depression
  • Loneliness
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