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Band 3

Cities around the world are continuing to expand as people leave the countryside. Some people prefer to live in the city while others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views.

The
dramatically
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 exchange can be seen that
cities
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 quantity are continuing
expand
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to expand
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,
cause
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causing
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 two
willingness
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main reasons
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,which include
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living
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 in the
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countryside
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countryside,
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whereas
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 the opposite prefer to live in the downtown.Both are understandable. The trend of
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cities'development
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development
 is
unstopptable
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unstoppable
.In
this
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 situation,it might cause the trend of population increasing,which
further
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lead
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leads
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 to the competition
between
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for
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the
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apply
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job
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jobs
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,
community
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the community
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 or more.The pressure of socialize may make
people
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 exhausted
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, that
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that
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which
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generate
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can generate
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 a series of mental health problems,so that in
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 case,
people
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 think one of the
solution
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solutions
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 is to move to the
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countryside
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countryside,
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 where they
could
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can
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 stay away from
comlex
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complex
 relationships.
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,the
countryside
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 has not been completely
commercialize
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commercialised
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 or industrial.
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 place remains the nature ,
people
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 could let themselves relax meanwhile to conentrate on their insight
instead
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 of the fake things in
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apply
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society.
In
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 an opposite perspective,
cities
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expand
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expanding
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continueingly
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continuously
 means that you may get more
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to think about
the
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apply
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career development,which
they
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apply
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could earn more money that maybe to afford the whole family's payments,they want to create a more
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enrich
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 world for their parents or
childs
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children
.
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,
cities
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 have
diversity
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diverse
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 things
such
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 as technology you may have never seen before that broaden our horizon, or the luxury clothes you want to wear to achieve your desire and
ambicious
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ambition
. These different
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 may be balanced
acoording
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according
 to the
goverments
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government's
 effort.The agency
make
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makes
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 some
policeto
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policies to
 limit the population between
cities
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 and
countryside
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 to
fufill
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fulfil
 preferences for most
people
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.Whatever the views,society must respect
there
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their
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 requirements.

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planning
Plan a clear path. Say the position, then show both views, then end with a short view of your own in one or two lines.
structure
Write in two or three paragraphs. Start with a short intro, then a paragraph for each view, then a short conclusion.
linking
Use clear topic sentences to begin each paragraph. Use simple connects like 'on the one hand', 'but', 'for example', 'in addition'.
language
Keep sentences short. Check grammar and spelling so words are easy to read.
content
The essay tries to show both sides of the topic.
content
It has some ideas about why people move and what they gain or lose.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolitan areas
  • economic opportunities
  • career advancement
  • healthcare facilities
  • cultural diversity
  • countryside
  • tranquil environment
  • cost of living
  • close-knit communities
  • rural areas
  • housing affordability
  • social amenities
  • employment prospects
  • cultural vibrancy
  • hustle and bustle
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