Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some part of the population believes that the leading environmental issue of
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is the extinction of certain
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of living beings and plants. Meanwhile, there are
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who say that ,nowadays, some more significant environmental problems exist.
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, I strongly agree with the second opinion.
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, the first view should be discovered more precisely in order to build an opinion , because
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it is just
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loose words.
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, the loss of particular
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plants and animals is a common process. There are over a billion kinds of animals, corresponding
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.
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, obviously, some of them are more accustomed to the rapidly increasing
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impact on
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nature, so they can live with humanity together.
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, those who can not handle changes that are caused by
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will probably disappear in the near future.
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, if the population wanted to keep some
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, it would do it.
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, as it did with sheep, cows, pigs, etc., by artificially repopulating them.
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, as I mentioned before, the loss of
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is the natural process that would still occur if
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did not exist.
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, biologically stronger
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of living creatures just eat the weaker
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, until the second one completely dieы as a
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. In
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case, all the dodo birds died because they were too weak to handle predators' hunting.
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, because of my lack of experience in
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field, most likely, I do not know some information that would change my opinion. From my knowledge, the more important issues of our time are various forms of pollution, especially
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one.
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annually get rid of tons of chemicals in rivers, lakes and oceans.
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, smoke from cars spreads through the
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so quickly and considering the fact that there are millions of cars around the world,
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they pollute the
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with thousands of gallons of smoke daily.
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my recent discovery from the internet, London's
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quality has decreased significantly
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only
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10last years, compared to 2015. In conclusion, I suggest that
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should focus more on pollution of the environment and fixing it rather than on the extinction of some
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that do not contribute meaningful changes, regard they exist or not.

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planning
Plan your essay before you write. Start with a short intro that states both views and your own view. Then one paragraph on each side. End with a clear conclusion that states your view.
structure
Be clear about your main point in every paragraph. Start with a topic sentence that shows what the paragraph will discuss.
grammar
Use simple, correct grammar. Watch verb tense and plural. Short sentences can help.
examples
Give one or two strong examples for each idea. Make sure the example connects to the idea.
cohesion
Use link words to show how ideas fit. For example: first, also, but, however, therefore.
content
The writer shows a view and a clear opinion.
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Some real examples are used (dodo, pollution, London air).
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There is effort to argue about both sides.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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