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Some feel that schools should be mixed with both girls and boys attending while others feel the genders ought to be separated.

There is a debate over how pupils should
study
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gender
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genders
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 should
study
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 together, and others arguing that they should
study
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 separately. In my opinion, schools should be mixed with both girls and boys as it helps them to be communicative.
Studing
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Studying
 separately can
become
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make
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 a pupil more
stressful
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stressed
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 and uncommunicative. Because a pupil who
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study
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studies
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 with just boys, in the future he will
work
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 with just boys too
and
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, and
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 it is bad because we all have a
chanse
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chance
 to be
on
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in
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 a
one
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apply
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group with
other type
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people
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 of
gender
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 and if it
will be
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is
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, we can not
work
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at
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on
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 that
expereince
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experience
 and leave the job
and
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, and
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 it will
become
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cause
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 him to feel
stress
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.
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example
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 even if a boy studied
good
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well
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 at
school
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 and had good marks, he will not
work
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 in a good job because jobs need
comunicative
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communicative
 employers. If
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school
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the school
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will have
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has
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 both sides of
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gender
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genders
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, pupils who
study
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 there will become more communicative and friendly. Because a pupil who studied with other
type
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types
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 of
gender
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,
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apply
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 will be able to
work
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 with anyone in the
future
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future,
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 because he will know how to
comunicate
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communicate
 with others
because of
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due to
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school
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 experience
and
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, and
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 he will be able to find a lot of good friends.
For
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example
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example,
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 a girl studied
good
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well
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 at
school
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 and had good marks,
then
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 she will try to
aply
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apply
 to
work
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 and she will do it because she
have
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has
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knowlage
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knowledge
 and experience
so
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, so
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 it will be easy
to
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for
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 her to enter
to
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apply
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work
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. If you want to be
comunicative
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communicative
 and friendly, I can
say
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tell
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 you that you need to enter to
school
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 where
gender
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 doesn't
metter
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matter
.

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task response
Task response: You speak on one side. Add two sides first, then give your view. End with a short clear close.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use linking words like first, also, but, however. Try one idea per paragraph and keep the idea clear.
grammar
Grammar: Check subject-verb form. Example: 'a pupil who studies', 'they study', 'it is' rather than 'it will be' in some places. Keep plural for many people.
lexical
Vocabulary: Use easy words. Some spellings are off. Fix words like 'studying', 'chance', 'communication' (or 'communicative'), 'experience'.
content
Content: Add a real example from school life. Give one or two clear points with link to why mixed schools help.
idea
Your view is clear and you take a side.
structure
The essay has an intro that states the topic.
example
You use 'for example' to show a point.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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