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The chart shows divorce rates in Finland and Sweden between 2011 and 2015.

The chart shows divorce rates in Finland and Sweden between 2011 and 2015.
The given bar
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graph
 compares the percentage of
divorce
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 cases reported in two countries, namely Finland and
Sweden
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, over a period of five years from 2011 to 2015. In general,
while
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 a declining trend was observed in
Sweden
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, the Finns followed an upward trend.
To begin
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 with, the
divorce
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 cases were reported at around 45% among the Swedish in 2011,
whereas
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 it was recorded just under 40% in Finland. In the subsequent year, nearly half of the married couples in
Sweden
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 got separated, which is marked as the highest percentage in the five-year time period.
Then
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 a consistent fall was noted in the following years that eventually ceased at just over 35% in 2015, which is the lowest recorded rate in the chart of
Sweden
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.
In contrast
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 to the downward trend among the Swedish, the
divorce
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 rates among the Finns were gradually climbing.
Although
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 an initial fall was observed in 2012 to nearly one-third of the population, it was followed by a steady surge in percentage in the next two years. In 2014, the
divorce
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 rates in Finland
plateued
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plateaued
 at around 40%.
Overall
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, though
Sweden
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was having
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 a higher rate of divorces in the beginning, the Finns surpassed them by the end of
stipulated
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the stipulated
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 time.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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