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These days, many films and pieces of music are free online. Is this a positive or negative development? Write your reasons and use examples from your experience.

Nowadays, many films and pieces of
music
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 are free online. In my
opinions
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opinion
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, it is a negative development in
the
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society. I will
use
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 two
reason
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reasons
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 to explain.
People
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 always listen the
music
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 and watch
the
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apply
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film
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films
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 at home or
use
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 their
phone
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phones
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.
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 , they
use
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the
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google
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Google
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 to search
the
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for the
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film
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 , find out the free
vision
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viewing
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 online. It did not need to go
the
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 cinema to waste extra money to watch the
film
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. Actually, it has
the
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a
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 copyright problem.
Copyright
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The copyright
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 problem in free
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film
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films
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lost
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loses
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 the
film
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 value and
influence
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influences
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people
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 cannot
use
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 the internet correctly. It
become
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became
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the
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a
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 big issue
on
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in
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 the
media
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devekopment
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development
 in the future.The
music
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are
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is
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 free online , it will influence the singer and
people
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 who create the songs.
People
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 always want to
use
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 the free version to do their own creation. It lost
their
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its
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creative
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creativity
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.
Also
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, it
become
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becomes
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effect
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effective
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 the
society
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society's
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develop
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development of
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 the
media
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 industry in the future.
People
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 just want to watch the free version
on
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apply
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the
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apply
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online. Just like I watch
netflix
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Netflix
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 or
disney
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Disney+
plus
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apply
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, why
I
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do I
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still need to pay the money for the apps to watch the
film
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.
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?
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 The singer
promote
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promotes
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 their album to get the money. In
these
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this
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 process, it creates the
media
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industries
industies
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industies,
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brings
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bringing
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people
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having
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the
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job
opportunity
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opportunities
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. If
people
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 just keep on
the
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apply
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watching or listening
the
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to the
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 free online will be the
gobal
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global
 issues. In
the
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conclusion, many films and
piece
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pieces
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 of
music
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 are free online
having
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, having
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 the copyright problem and
infulence
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influencing
 the
media
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industries
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industries'
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 development in the future.
People
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 cannot
use
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 the internet correctly and cannot
be
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apply
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protect the
creator
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creator's
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 works.

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task response
State your view in the first sentence and restate it in the conclusion. Give two or three clear reasons that link to your view.
coherence
Use simple connectors to show how ideas connect, like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'so'. Follow a clear paragraph plan: state a point, add detail, end with a link to the next point.
language
Work on grammar and spelling. Keep to simple, correct sentence forms and avoid long mistakes.
examples
Make each example tight and related to the reason you give. Do not say things that do not fit.
task response
The writer shows a clear view against the idea.
coherence
The essay has more than one reason and a basic idea of how to connect ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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