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Band 1

With the rise in popularity of the Internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the new generation, the rise in popularity of the Internet ,
newspaper
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newspapers
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 will soon become a thing of the past. That's
a
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ture
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true
. People use more than 4-5 hours to watch
the
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a
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phone
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day
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. People
easily
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are easily
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be attract
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attracted
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 by the phone. It
is
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has
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 become more common in recent years. Big data will provide the
lastest
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latest
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 news for
user
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users
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 even
thought
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though
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 you use
the
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instagram
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Instagram
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 or
facebook
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Facebook
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. The new media help people get the information or any news very soon. It shows the newspaper did not have any teenagers will watch. It
become
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has become
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the
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a trend
on
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to
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 use the phone.
It
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There
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 is a rise in
popularity
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the popularity
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 of the Internet. It
change
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changes
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 the traditional method
on watch
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of watching
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 the news or the new information in
the
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society.

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task
State your view clearly at the start. Say if you agree or disagree.
task
Give two or three reasons. Use one example.
coherence
Plan your answer in order. Put one idea in each paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas, like and, but, so, also.
language
Fix big grammar mistakes and spelling. Use simple form.
language
Keep words from the common list. Short sentences help.
strength
The topic is clear and you touch how the net can push news.
strength
You think about the role of phone and social media in news.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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