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The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in primary, secondary, and tertiary
education
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 in developing and developed
countries
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 during 1990 and 1998.
Although
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 both groups aimed to reach gender parity at all
levels
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, their progress differed significantly.
In contrast
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, developed
countries
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 were much closer to the target. In 1990, they had nearly equal numbers in primary and secondary
education
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, and even exceeded parity in tertiary
education
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. By 1998, they maintained high ratios in primary and secondary
levels
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 and saw a notable rise in tertiary
education
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, reaching 112 girls per 100 boys. Meanwhile, developing
countries
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 started with lower figures across all
levels
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.
However
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, they showed gradual improvement by 1998, especially in secondary and tertiary
education
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, though they still fell short of the goal.
Overall
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, the data
suggests
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suggest
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 that developed
countries
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 were more successful in promoting female
education
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, particularly at higher
levels
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. Developing
countries
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 made progress, but
further
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 efforts are needed to close the gender gap, especially in tertiary
education
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where
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, where
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 disparities remain most pronounced.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, countries, levels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • number
  • girls
  • boys
  • enrolled
  • education
  • primary
  • secondary
  • higher
  • ratio
  • indicate
  • barriers
  • accessible
  • significant
  • decline
  • pursuing
  • features
  • comparisons
  • gender
  • equality
  • societal
  • norms
  • progress
  • issues
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