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The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided charts illustrate statistics about the Little Chalfont Library, including the age groups and loan categories in 2016, and the total
number
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 of
loans
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 from 2007 to 2016.
Overall
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,
adults
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in
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the
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age
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 18-64 made up the biggest proportion of librarians,
while
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children
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's
fiction
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 and adult
fiction
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 made up the highest share among all seven categories for total
loans
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. Meanwhile, the decade
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 witnessed a gradual incline
for
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total
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the total
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number
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 of
loans
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 in the library. To be precise, about
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half of the library members are
adults
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, where
children
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, young
adults
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(13-17 years old),
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adults
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and adults
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 older than 65 composed the rest 49%, with 22%, 15%,
12
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and 12
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%, respectively. Turning to the
loans
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, comprising
fiction
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, non-
fiction
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 for both
children
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 and
adults
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, and some other categories
such
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 as DVDs,
audio books
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, and young
adults
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, the
fiction
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 apparently contributed the highest percentages, with 38% each for both
children
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 and adult ones. The information mentioned
abover
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above
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is
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 all
in
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from
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 2016, with approximately 22,000
loans
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 as the highest
number
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 of
loans
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 since 2007. Originally, about 15,000 items were loaned before a steady climb in the following decade. Peaking at 2011 with 22,000
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,
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the
number
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 of
loans
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 dropped slightly before bouncing back to 22,000 in 2016.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, loans, adults, children, fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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