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Some people think that governments should prioritise building new infrastructure such as roads and bridges. Others believe they should focus more on protecting the environment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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the
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recent years, the issue of state budget investment has attracted considerable public attention.
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 some people
belive
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believe
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 that
national
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the national
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 budget should be distributed to new infrastructure
such
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 as roads and bridges, others argue that the government should concentrate on
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environment
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environmental
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 protection. In my opinion, I side with the
later
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latter
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due to
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 its sustainable benefits. On the one hand, those who support the investment
on
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 new infrastructure claim that it may boost
the
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economic growth rapidly.
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 means that the additional roads or bridges connecting rural areas and economic hubs will support logistics and trading practices.
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, the produce from
Mekong
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the Mekong
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 Delta
are
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 quickly transported to big cities, generating
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 stable income for farmers.
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, the economy
possibly
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 develop.
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, I would side with those who believe that financial
plan
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plans
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 should be spent on protecting
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environment
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the environment
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 because of its long-term impacts.
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 is because protecting nature and cutting pollution is essential for citizens' health and
avoid
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 big costs in the future.
In stead
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Instead
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 of destroying
forest
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forests
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 to make way for new infrastructure, the government should focus more on
the
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projects with green ideas
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such
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, such
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 as high
technology
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technology,
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 to
reduece
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reduce
 the gas
emission
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emissions
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 of factories.
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, not only the
environment
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 but
also
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 the society may benefit in the long run. In conclusion,
although
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 the opinions may differ, I hold the view that money should be allocated to
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environment
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environmental
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 protection for its positive effects. The government should consider carefully before making any decision about investment.

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content
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coherence
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grammar
Fix small grammar errors and spell words right to be clear.
task response
State your view in the first paragraph and restate it in the end.
task response
The writer shows a clear view and says what is favored.
coherence
The essay covers both sides and gives a local example.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • roads
  • bridges
  • transport
  • traffic
  • jobs
  • growth
  • money
  • cost
  • plan
  • project
  • environment
  • nature
  • air
  • water
  • pollution
  • health
  • safety
  • balance
  • long term
  • short term
  • benefit
  • disadvantage
  • rule
  • protect
  • save
  • green
  • future
  • invest
  • budget
  • policy
  • idea
  • view
  • opinion
  • however
  • on one hand
  • on the other hand
  • finally
  • conclude
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