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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Increasing the prices of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree? what other measures do you think might be effective?

raising
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 the amount of money for gas can decrease
traffic
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 on the road and
pollution
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 as well. I agree with
this
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sentance
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sentence
. Mainly because I believe that many
indivduals
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individuals
 will not be capable of paying that price.
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, a decrease
of
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in
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traffic
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 will happen, and there are so many alternatives to solve
this
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 issue. Lowering the price of electric cars and motor bikes can be so
effictivly
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effectively
 positive. Having to pay more for gas can make you rethink
of
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having a petrol car.
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, you will be able to lower how crowded the roads are and
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pollution
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reduce pollution
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.
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 studies
shows
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show
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 that the number one
causing reason
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cause
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 of
pollution
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 is car
traffic
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. Solving
this
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 problem could
deffinitly
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definitely
 help us deal with
pollution
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 better.
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, there are better ways to deal with
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 situation.
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 could possibly create a bigger problem with transportation. To avoid all problems
you
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, you
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 could raise another solution by making electric
trasportation
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transportation
 methods
cheeper
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cheaper
.
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 can tempt so many petrol car users.
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Therefore
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 I find
this
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 solution way easier to apply. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
this
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 statement
raise
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 a great way of avoiding
traffic
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 and
pollution
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. People should be able to switch to better methods for
the
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apply
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society. But
,
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apply
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 I really think that electric cars are the way to go.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a clear view. Then give two or three main ideas with links. End with a short conclusion.
language
Fix the spell and grammar. Check common mistakes. Use simple and correct words.
content
Give more facts or examples. Do not only say 'studies' or 'some think' unless you name the source or give an example.
content
Be consistent with your idea. If you say petrol price rise, show how it can lead to fewer cars and more use of electric transport.
idea
Your essay shows a view of the topic and you agree with a plan.
content
You give a goal, like to use electric cars to cut pollution.
structure
There is a sense of argument and close to a plan.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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