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TODAY MORE AND MORE STUDENTS ARE MOVING TO DIFFERENT COUNTRIES FOR HIGHER EDUCATION. WHAT ARE THE FACTORS BEHIND IT? IS IT A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE TREND?

The fact is beyond doubt that
knowledgers
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knowledge
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athough
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although
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notion
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 positive impact, yet its downside cannot be overlooked.I will shed light on both of its aspects in the following paragraphs. On the brighter
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 if pupils will pursue their education
offshore
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offshore,
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 they are more likely to
achive
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achieve
 goals, as
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it is
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irrefutable
 that, in order to be able to become more
successful
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successful,
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 we must explore our
ablities
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abilities
, and
studing
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studying
 away from home is
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 opportunity to do so.
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flourish
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 economy of that particular country which
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 student is choosing to study.
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for
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 by CNN illustrated that
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ever since
 Canada has
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increased
 the
numbers
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 of international
students
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students,
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 their
overall
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 GDP is surging and labour shortage is
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decreasing
. Critics of
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 statement argue that , owing
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 trend
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 of countries like India,
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Indonesia
, Pakistan so on , are no longer
interesed
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interested
 in staying in their home countries
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 will have serious
repercurshions
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repercussions
 in future
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 these countries.
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 if all the talented
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ones
 are gone from any country , it
become
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extermely
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extremely
 difficult for a nation to thrive. To wrap
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 up, I strongly believe that
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 is a positive trend not only for a student but
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the knoweledge
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knoweledge
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knowledge
 provider country, both
economicaly
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economically
 and
socialy
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socially
.
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aggree
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agree
 that there are some
down side
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downsides
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of
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 notion , but its pros overshadow its cons.

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task
Task response: Answer the prompt clearly. Say your view on the trend, then give two or three reasons and a simple plan for how the trend could go. Use one or two short examples to back up your points.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Arrange ideas in a clear order. Use links like 'first, then' or 'also' to show how ideas are connected. Start each paragraph with a topic idea and end with a short line that repeats your point.
grammar
Language: Use simple and correct form. Check spell and grammar. Fix big mistakes like 'irefutable' and 'can' or 'decreacing'. Use plain words and short sentences.
content
There is a plan to discuss both sides.
structure
Intro and conclusion exist.
evidence
Some examples are used.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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