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Some believe that schools should focus more on academic subjects. Others argue that practical skills should be emphasized. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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contemporary society, the enhancement of society has made education methods
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 increasingly popular issue.
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 the background of
exam-oriented
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an exam-oriented
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 education system, it is widely believed that practical
skills
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 should be
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while
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 that schools should
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focus more
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 on academic subjects. Personally, I actually endorse the view that both of them are
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 crucial. First and foremost, academic lesson is an absolutely indispensable part of education. Specifically, not only can they provide theoretical
knowledges
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knowledge
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 for college
application
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applications
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 and
further
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researches
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but
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also
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helps
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cultivating
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 the capacity of
problem solving
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 and critical thinking. These
knowledges
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knowledge
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 and abilities make the students more competitive in future university or company applications, even useful throughout their lives.
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, for students who know how to think critically and logically, they won’t easily go with the stream or misjudge issues
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in a school project or
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when dealing
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 with
works
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work
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.
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, academic lessons definitely should be
attached
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 importance
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, we’re now living in an era
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 basically everything is connected with the latest technology and applications in all aspects of fields
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 to develop their own AI assistant, including programming, translation, photography and so on.
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 practical
skills
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 gradually play a vital role as
it
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they
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acts
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 as a bridge
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, putting
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 theories into practice.
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, provided that scientists and scholars
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lack
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practical
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hand-on
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skills
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 or research and project
skills
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, theories can never become real creations. In conclusion,
school
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schools
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 are supposed to focus
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on both
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of
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academic lessons and practical
skills
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. Academic capacity provides basic preconditions
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 theories and mindset,
practical
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and practical
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skills
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connects
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 them with real life. Only when combining both of them, real differences
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be made.

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task
Make a plan at start. Say your view in one short line.
writing
Use short, clear sentences. Break long lines into two or three parts.
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Give real and clear example to show your idea.
content
You show both sides and give your own view.
organization
There is a clear end with a short conclusion.
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