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Millions of dollars are spent on space research every yeas. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree

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 is proposed that millions of dollars should be spent on improving living
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 on Earth
instead
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 of spending on
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 every
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.
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 there are valid arguments supporting the stance
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,I still firmly believe that spending
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 on
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 represents a more reasonable perspective.Both reasons and
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relevant
 explanation will be mentioned in
this
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 essay below. Admittedly,it is true that spending
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 on improving living
standards
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 on Earth brings some benefits.
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to
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 begin with,spending
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 on improving
residents
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' living
standard
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standards
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 guarantees their physical and mental health.
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,
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 is common to discover that adding more
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 into fundamental
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facilities
,
such
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 as road
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maintenance
,medical security,launch of caring services and so on,
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make
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residents
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' daily life more
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in addition
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 to
increaing
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increasing
 their happiness.
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,spending
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 on
residents
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' living
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standards'
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standards
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 promotion serves as a wise idea,which
enhancesthe
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enhances the
 social stability.
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 could
be
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 commonly seen that the dismissive population is dramatically
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 with a
larde
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large
 number of the population of crime
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as a result
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,adding more
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on
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 their basic living security could obviously meet their basic living needs,decreasing the possibility of social issues.
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 spending
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 on improving living
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 is
benefitial
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beneficial
,spending
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 on
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 is
also
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 necessary.First and foremost,adding the fund
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 can certainly take the
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career
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 of a nation to life,because in the
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 of
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career
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,the expensive tools are necessities,which are essential for the core of
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.What's more,spending more
funds
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 on
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career
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 could truly promote a nation's science and technology level,because adding more
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 on employing more scientists could significantly boost the
facillity
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facility
 of
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,
trigger
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 it with
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 promotion.
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,a nation's level of science and technology will be rapidly
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. In conclusion,
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 on improving
residents
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' living
standards
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 is considerable.But after considering both
side
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 of the problem,I still agree with adding more
funds
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 to
space
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research
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structure
Work on clear and strong ideas in every para. Show a real view of the issue. Stick to one main point and keep it steady.
coherence
Have a clear topic sentence for each paragraph. Make your links fit and help the flow.
language
Use short, direct sentences. Check word form and spell well so the message is easy to read.
strength
The essay shows a clear position on the issue.
strength
Two body parts give reasons for both sides.
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