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The charts and table below show the percentage of customers choosing different kinds of websites when shopping online and the percentage of customers shopping online for different reasons in two countries in 2012.

The charts and table below show the percentage of customers choosing different kinds of websites when shopping online and the percentage of customers shopping online for different reasons in two countries in 2012.
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 the pie chart illustrates the data about the proportions of the citizens
utilizing
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utilising
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 the divergent types of
websites
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 for online purchasing, the table shows the motives for shopping online in various countries in 2012.
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, regardless of the
country
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country,
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 the majority of people used both kinds of
websites
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 for their lower prices. In Australia, 24% and 12% were the indicators of the only foreign or local
websites
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, respectively.
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, the figures for these categories
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 noticeably higher in New
Zealand
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with
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, with
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 only
oversea
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overseas
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websites
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 representing 36% and local
websites
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 14%.
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 the
per cent
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percentage
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 of the inhabitants who used both of them is 62% in Australia, it is 50% in New
Zealand
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. When it comes to rationalities, reasonable prices
is
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are
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main
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the main
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 factor in 51% and 59% in
new zealanders
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New Zealanders
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 and
australians
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Australians
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, respectively.
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 the
convinience
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convenience
 is
highly-valued
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highly valued
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 in 23% of
australians
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Australians
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,
the
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apply
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34% of people from New
Zealand
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is
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are
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 a side of
expanded
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an expanded
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 range of choice. The other reasons are
same
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the same
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 in both nations
with
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, with
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 the rate indicating 2%. For 16% of
australians
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Australians
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 large range, for 13% of
new
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New
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Zealand
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Zealanders
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 people
convinience
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convenience
 is crucial.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words websites, zealand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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