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Some people think educated people more valuable than people who learned skills through experience. Do you think educated people are most valuable for society? What kind of skill can people learn through experience that can benefit society?

There is no denying the fact that education is a crucial part
an
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 individual's
life
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. It is a commonly held belief that learning through
life
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experience
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 is more effective than learning through school. In my opinion, I consider that we have to learn some skills through
experience
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 because we can not learn
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 when we study in school or university.
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 with, a lot of skills , even if
people
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 learn them in their lectures, they will not be professional at doing them if they do not try to practice them.
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, practising is one of the important aspects of learning.
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, experiences support
people
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's quality of
life
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 because they give
people
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 the opportunity to see the reality of what they try to do.
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, learning how to deal with financial problems will be more effective if we fall into financial trouble, rather than studying it as a theoretical part in our classes. Another point to consider, we can not ignore the benefits and the impact of education in making
people
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 more mature and well-educated. It is
also
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 possible to say that combining
experience
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 and education will assist in improving the quality of
life
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.
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,
people
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 will apply what they learn in real
life
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 , but when they face a rare situation, they will learn more through
experience
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. In conclusion,despite
people
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 having different views, I believe that experiences make learning
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easier and we can not forget what we learn if it happened to us and we will deal with it in a better way in the future.

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task
State a clear view on whether educated people are the most valuable for society.
content
language
Fix grammar and try to use shorter, simple sentences.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas and keep a steady flow.
structure
End with a strong conclusion that restates your view.
structure
The essay has a clear plan with introduction, body and conclusion.
example
It gives an example to show a point.
idea
It shows the idea that education and life experience can work together.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nuanced debate
  • theoretical knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • innovations
  • intellectual growth
  • economi... Read Morec growth
  • practical skills
  • adaptability
  • hands-on problem-solving
  • skilled tradespeople
  • artisans
  • entrepreneurs
  • experiential learning
  • deep understanding
  • efficiency
  • niche markets
  • trial and error
  • community-based solutions
  • analytical thinking
  • foundation for future learning
  • creativity
  • balanced appreciation
  • well-rounded
  • innovative
  • functional society
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