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Social Media has helped us increase our virtual networks. This has isolated us physically, making us socially awkward in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

It is an undeniable fact that these days, online networking has become easier
due to
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 social
media
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. There is another view about the given trend, that it leads to more virtual
exsistance
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existence
 rather
that
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than
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 physical.
because
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 of
which
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this
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, some feel nervous in public. I am mostly in favour of the aforementioned statement.
This
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 essay will delineate both aspects. There are several reasons behind considering it to be true
,
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 the paramount
one
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 is
,
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 comfort zone. These days advancement of internet technology has allowed
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people
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 to do different types of work
at
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from
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 the comfort of their homes. During the
Covid 19
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COVID-19
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 pandemic,
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, many companies went online and offered work from home to their employees.
This
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 led to less public exposure, which affected the
people
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 in many ways,
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 as low confidence, public
enxiety
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anxiety
, and so on.
Nonetheless
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, another major reason is
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 living a
reel
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real
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 life. Since
,
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 everyone
enjoy
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enjoys
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 networking online,
as
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there is a big wall between
internet
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the internet
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 and reality. Many
people
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tries
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try
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 to pretend a fake personality online by posting different content on their social
media
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 accounts. They lack confidence to be in
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public or to meet anyone in person, as they do not want to reveal their
truth
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true selves
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. An article,
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, was published in The Times claiming that
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 many social
media
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 influencers fake their
life style
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lifestyle
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 to misguide the public.
Which
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This
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 leaves a bad impact on society.
On the other hand
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, online networking
also
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 has many positives. The prime
one
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 is building a big network on
international
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an international
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 level. In person, it is
imposible
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impossible
 to meet many
people
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 from different nooks and corners of the world, but
internet
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the internet
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 provides us
different
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with different
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 platforms to connect with
people
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 for different things. LinkedIn,
for instance
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, is
one
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 of the
plateform
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platforms
that is
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 used to build
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a proffesional
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proffesional
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professional
 network, in the same way Instagram helps individuals to make networks with different
people
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 around the world based on different interests.
To conclude
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,
although
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 there is no denying the fact that social
media
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 networking helps all to connect to
people
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 worldwide.
However
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, only networking online in
one
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's comfort zone leads to low
confidenace
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confidence
, public enxciety, the fear of judgement, and so on.

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structure
Build a clear plan before you write. Start with a short intro that states your view. Then give two or three ideas in separate paragraphs. End with a short conclusion.
coherence
Work on linking ideas. Use simple joining words like 'first', 'next', 'but', 'also', 'however' to connect points.
coherence
Be clear with each idea. Give one main point per paragraph and back it with a short example.
grammar/spelling
Check spelling and word form. Common wrong spell words in your draft such as existance, enxiety, platform, professional; fix them.
lexical
Use simple and correct words. Do not use long forms without need. This helps readers follow your idea.
content
Use real evidence when you can. If you mention a claim, give a short example or fact.
content
Clear view on the topic is stated.
content
Uses real examples like Covid work from home and LinkedIn.
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