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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Individuals say riding cycles should be permitted in downtown
rather
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areas rather
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 than vehicles and public transport
be
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should be
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 restricted from urban
ares
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areas
.
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 essay agrees with
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 statement because riding cycles will save individuals time
spending
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 on the roads, it will enhance
environment
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the environment
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 of the city
and
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, and
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people
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 will save their
money
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 from
vehicles
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vehicle
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fuel
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. Riding bicycles will improve the environment of downtown
areas
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. Residents will live
comfortabe
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comfortably
 and sleep properly without facing any noise issues. They can ride to other
areas
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 in a calm way without facing
from
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any obstacles in the roadway. Individuals can travel to multiple
areas
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 in an hour. Other
people
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 who live outside downtown can come to
this
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 area without facing traffic problems. The air in
this
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 area will be clean
and
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people
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 will smell fresh air
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. This
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this
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 will make them feel comfortable and be positive.
Citiziens
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Citizens
 will save their
money
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 from
consuming
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spending
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 on
fuel
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.
Thesedays
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These days
, prices of
fuel
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started
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have started
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 to increase. Others spend
their half of
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half of their
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 income on
fuel
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. The more you drive a lot in a day
the
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, the
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 more you will consume a huge amount of
fuel
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. Riding cycles will save a
big
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significant
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 amount of
money
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 for residents.
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, my uncle
spend
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spends
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 100 dollars on
fuel
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 monthly because he drives to multiple
areas
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 in a day. After
month
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a month
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, my uncle
start
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started
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 to ride
cycle
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a cycle
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 and he had
great
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a great
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 experience
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such
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 as he saved his
money
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, time,
lifestlye
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lifestyle
become
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became
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 better and healthier.
To conclude
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, riding bicycles
improve
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improves
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 the environment of urban
areas
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 and
enhance
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enhances
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people
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people's
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 lives in an effective way. I believe using bicycles
are
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is more
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 beneficial than using other transportation.

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task response
State a clear stance in the first line and keep it through the essay.
coherence
Add 2 or 3 main ideas and explain each with a simple example.
cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, next, also, finally.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar for easy words such as city, environment, bicycle.
structure
Finish with a short conclusion that restates your view and sums up points.
examples
Use one or two clear examples to support each idea.
content
The writer shows a clear view that bikes can be used in city centres.
example
A real example (an uncle paying less for fuel) is used to back up a point.
structure
There is a sense of order in paragraphs and a rough flow of ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • traffic
  • improve
  • viable
  • population
  • investment
  • infrastructure
  • policy
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